Congratulations Damien. You are the first person to enter the 2021 Poetry Slam. I like your subject. I am interested in solar flares which erupt from the sun. They are like giant flames approximately 10 times larger than the Earth. And yes I agree the sun is very hot, so hot that I couldn't really compare it to anything on Earth.
Tino pai Damien! Space is such a fascinating place to learn about. I really enjoy learning about planets in our Solar system. Continue to create such great mahi!
Kia ora Damien. Congratulation for being the first person to enter the Poetry Slam! I like the way your second poem makes people stop and think about how big space is. Do you think your writing could be clearer if you had a light colour on the dark background?
Kia ora Damien My name is Nasteho I go to Hay Park School Congratulations for being the first person to submit on the poetry slam I also competed in the poetry slam please check out my blog. I also enjoyed reading your poem. Next time you could change the font and the colours Did it take you days? How did you get that image?
Morena Damien it's Justus from Owairaka district school, I like both of your poems i enjoyed reading your Solar system poems keep up the good work Bye :).
Hello Damien its Milla here from your tui mai tui atu class (Whenua) WOW I really liked your poems they are very cool to look at and read but if you want it to rhyme maybe look at a dictionary for rhyming words. keep it up mate
Hi Damien its Milla here from your tui mai tui atu class Whenua WHOAH its really cool I love how you matched the colours on each slide and if you want it to rhyme maybe look at a dictionary but overall its great
Congratulations Damien. You are the first person to enter the 2021 Poetry Slam. I like your subject. I am interested in solar flares which erupt from the sun. They are like giant flames approximately 10 times larger than the Earth. And yes I agree the sun is very hot, so hot that I couldn't really compare it to anything on Earth.
ReplyDeleteTino pai Damien! Space is such a fascinating place to learn about. I really enjoy learning about planets in our Solar system. Continue to create such great mahi!
ReplyDeleteKia ora Damien. Congratulation for being the first person to enter the Poetry Slam! I like the way your second poem makes people stop and think about how big space is. Do you think your writing could be clearer if you had a light colour on the dark background?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Damien My name is Nasteho I go to Hay Park School
ReplyDeleteCongratulations for being the first person to submit on
the poetry slam I also competed in the poetry slam please check out my blog. I also enjoyed reading your poem. Next time you could change
the font and the colours Did it take you days? How did you get
that image?
Morena Damien it's Justus from Owairaka district school,
ReplyDeleteI like both of your poems i enjoyed reading your Solar system poems keep up the good work Bye :).
Hello Damien its Milla here from your tui mai tui atu class (Whenua) WOW I really liked your poems they are very cool to look at and read but if you want it to rhyme maybe look at a dictionary for rhyming words. keep it up mate
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Hi Damien its Milla here from your tui mai tui atu class Whenua WHOAH its really cool I love how you matched the colours on each slide and if you want it to rhyme maybe look at a dictionary but overall its great
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